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Bob Beck's avatar

The story feels personal, the emotions and thoughts you’ve actually experienced. You’re writing appears to come from Joy!

Kai's avatar

thanks! i can’t say that this is me, i’m open about that … BUT there are things in here that are personal that i’ve snuck in, and i have had friends who go through this so i do have some second-hand knowledge 🫶

Kai's avatar

i’ll add a clarification on my thanks: i’m really glad that you reacted as you did, that it sounded like something i experienced personally; that means a lot because it makes me think that i am doing well as a writer if i wrote something at a level that it felt lived

Bob Beck's avatar

Kai, you write beyond your years. When we read something that’s authentic or appears to be it makes the experience much more real. Keep up the good work and more importantly enjoy what you do!❤️👍❤️👍

Kai's avatar

thank you! 🫶

Daniel's avatar

That image looks like Boulder Colorado, which I where I live. 😎

Kai's avatar

Yup! This story takes place at CU-Boulder, some liberties taken.

Dave's avatar

Kai, great chapter. Si is figuring out that life independently is scary and rough even to those who weren't watched over by family, friends, and the Church. Any Church. And aftet he decided to go to the frat house and rush, Mom calls like clock work. Oh wait. She always calls at that time. The partial truth came out of his mouth and he waited. No fire. No brimstone. Nobody coming to get him. But still he feels that feeling that someone will find out amd tell.

So, we wait for Thursday. And Si will suffer all day before he takes this important first step. Will his soul survive?

Kai's avatar

really glad you like the chapter; and, only time will tell … 🫶